Overal not bad, got a rocky "nightwish" thing going on, the mix in general could use a lot of work, but that's also due to the sounds it sounds like you're using (the drums sound a bit machine-drum like and the guitar sound is bit grating), the only other thing is the singers pitch, you might want to tune it a bit if you can (what software do you use, they all usually have something built in these days for pitch correction)

Im not a fan of "power ballads" in general. i understand this is not a big production so you had limited resources at your disposal, the drumming needs rounding im not sure if its a machine or a person, its on time but it feels to clinical. the guitars tone is a bit grating like was said before. id prefer to hear a creamier drive... and the vocals are a bit off... apart from the pitch... this is a worship song and i just dont "believe" her.. it lacks passion.

I wouldnt say theres a lack of talent here... all im saying if it were me id go back to the drawing board with this. It's rad that your trying to bring something new to the Cum books table here just rework it to be more apealing to a wider listening base.

I always ask myself after i wrote something... Would I actually listen to this in my car?

But thumbs up for the effort.

Nice work there... I agree with the other peeps... But I kinda like the grating guitar... makes me think of something like skillet... hehe.

You should enter the monthly competition!

beardedmoose wrote: Im not a fan of "power ballads" in general. i understand this is not a big production so you had limited resources at your disposal, the drumming needs rounding im not sure if its a machine or a person, its on time but it feels to clinical. the guitars tone is a bit grating like was said before. id prefer to hear a creamier drive... and the vocals are a bit off... apart from the pitch... this is a worship song and i just dont "believe" her.. it lacks passion.

I wouldnt say theres a lack of talent here... all im saying if it were me id go back to the drawing board with this. It's rad that your trying to bring something new to the Cum books table here just rework it to be more apealing to a wider listening base.

I always ask myself after i wrote something... Would I actually listen to this in my car?

But thumbs up for the effort.

This is good advice.

I think the main task for you now is to shape this into something more friendly to your target audience, which are Christians who like rock music (as a general observation). The one point beardedmoose pointed is the lack of passion, most of the tracks in the song (first song) are very mechanical sounding - especially vocals and drums, maybe even guitar here and there (although its better).

I like the second track more, better melodies.

There's a lot of potential here though, with a little more work it can be really special. Something I recently learned from a well known producer is, don't try to sound like anyone or please people in terms of the style you're playing. Honestly this is sounding too much like other bands in this genre (Lacuna Coil maybe?), go sit down and think what you can do to make your band stand out and be DIFFERENT. The only reason big bands like Fokofpolisiekar, DieHeuwels etc made it so well is because they came to the market with something different to offer to the Afrikaans scene while also sounding quite distinct when taken out of the Afrikaans label. Not trying to discourage, but I wish I followed this in my previous project which was a similar rock group.

You DO have special "magic" elements, the main thing now is to peel away everything that makes you sound like someone else and work on the special stuff you've got going, this is hard, but it will make you stand out, which is important in the music clutter we live in. This doesn't need to happen instantly, its a process.