This is a demo we recorded right after writing the song on my iPhone. The quality is surprisingly good but the amps were pointed away from iphone so they sound a little muffled. It is just the basic structure of the song but it sounds decent enough.

Please give me your opinions: http://m.soundcloud.com/boardingpassband/wake-up-demo-first-take

This song has an indie vibe but our others are alt-rock and hard rock mainly.

Thanks ?

Pretty good, although it's lacking a real strong hook.

Yeah - as you say, too much room sound on the guitars and the rhythm guitar is a bit middy/muddy.

Sounds like you just have to work on it a bit more to nail the dynamics and rhythm between vocals and music.

I agree with Alan regarding the lack of hook. I feel like it is constantly building up to something but never gets there; the energy picks up but never reaches a climax.

I like the feel though, I like the vocal choices and dynamics you have going in sections like 1:24.

Well the first part is meant to be guitar only around until around the 30 sec mark. Then drums and bass will come in and hopefully kick the energy up a bit. Then I was thinking for the second half the same chords in a surf-rocky way with some riff in e major over that which will hopefully give it much more power...then a change in chords for the last 30 sec or so.

Thanks for the opinions ? I'm pretty new to songwriting myself and really just wanted to know if it was worth something.