Kudos to you for putting your material out there. Well done. Not sure what sort of feedback youre looking for.. here are my thoughts.. hope it helps?
I like the vocal style. Reminds me a bit of Sisters of Mercy. If you could add back up vox to the mix, i think it could enrich the sound.
The percussion was cool.. were those samples?
For me, i think it could benefit the mix to bring the bass out a bit more... it kind of gets lost in the mix in places.
Im not sure if i could here a rhythm guitar or not. I put this down the the shaker sound being so prominent.
The lead guitar toward the end surprised me.. if anything... perhaps a dash less gain?
Did you double track the bass and or the guitars? If not, double tracking using slightly different tones could make them bigger sounding. If you did... then as above.. just a notch up on the vol to bring them to the fore a bit more.
Good stuff.. i like it. Well done again