Please crit

Visashi

Hi all,

Just finished recording some new stuff at home. Have a listen and plz crit..

Squonk

This is good stuff. Catchy tune. Feel like dancing ?

Love the acoustic guitar, sounds natural and real

Listened to all the stuff on your page, man it's good

studmissile

Visashi wrote: Hi all,

Just finished recording some new stuff at home. Have a listen and plz crit..

I really like your stuff, a refreshing take on worship music. Keep it up!

Visashi

Thanx guys I really appreciate the motivation!
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TokyoP0P

Liked, followed, need more!

I'm agnostic, but man I really love this. Great voice.

Stoffeltoo

Liked and commented. Your songs are cool.
For a moment I thought you were using a cajon for rhythm but the full drums really fills the song

Visashi

Stoffeltoo wrote: Liked and commented. Your songs are cool.
For a moment I thought you were using a cajon for rhythm but the full drums really fills the song

Thanx man! The percussion on the acoustic guitar body must have given a cajon-type feel. Although a cajun would've been quite helpful! Glad you guys like it ?

schizo

Yeah pretty cool man, but dont really know what you are looking for?

You unhappy with the song or are you looking for some constructive criticism to improve overall?

Its nice to like the song or songs but dont know if that helps?

lol dont know how to put it......

Visashi

Quinlan Kok wrote: Yeah pretty cool man, but dont really know what you are looking for?

You unhappy with the song or are you looking for some constructive criticism to improve overall?

Its nice to like the song or songs but dont know if that helps?

lol dont know how to put it......

Constructive crit will always be helpful. Anything that can help me improve. ?

schizo

Yeah its cool, ok so here is my opinion (and u know what they say, opinions are like a$$holes everyone has one and it stinks ) ?

Like the song, structure wise it might be a bit repetitive. Could try a different rhythm when strumming - or the intro you could pick the chords you play rather than strum the whole chord ( to really get the build up to the first chorus, felt like the build up went flat into the chorus)

And the second guitar ("lead") could play something else - rather than the same "feel" / rhythm just playing in octaves. That something else could be adding a harmony using the modes, or you can look at the chords and play the inversions and pick those chords. You can also look at the rhythm chords and see which intervals give the chord its sound and come up with a melody that hits only on those "important" notes on specific beats.

Add some chorus and reverb to the acoustics.

Hope that helps, dig the song but it sounds like you only wrote a 1/4 of it then took that part and repeated it.

I`m actually busy with harmony ? so I might be projecting that onto your song.