sour
Hi guuuuuuuuys.
I would like some feedback, opinions or criticisms on the following song/video.
Just note that I start the song with a short monologue, thereafter the piece builds up. I would also like to enquire what emotion settled in you when you viewed the video. I am aware that it might be an odd thing to ask, but it would very much aid me in dissecting how others interpret my creations.
Any contributions will be appreciated.
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Jack-Flash-Jr
I like... very Kubricky start... maybe edit out some of the repetition in the monologue, it loses impact if you hear the same sentiment too many times...
domhatch
well, i can't say it's to my tastes, but it looks very nicely put together. your monologue is a little longer than a 'short monologue'. if i may, i'd suggest you try to condense the ideas a bit (the same thing Jack Flash is saying i think). the music is reminiscent of jean-michel jarre for me, but i'd like to feel a more defined beginning, middle and ending.
otherwise i quite enjoyed it (despite it being outside my general scope of interest)
good luck
dh
