Ok here is another one. I must admit there is something bothering me, I've done this one a while back and didn't want to upload because I am unhappy with it, but ya, best way to figure out whats wrong is to post here for criticism I suppose. So here you go, be gentle ?
@Alan, yes I know my enunciation isn't there yet...
http://www.box.net/shared/1f6qz6oidb