Opinion on a song I made

sour

Hi guys.

A few months ago I posted a music video that I made, and moreover I explained (quite verbosely) in that thread that I am completely self-taught. Now once again, I humbly ask some sincere feedback, be it criticism, advice, or just an insouciant opinion.

Probably the most obvious trait of the song, is that I use soundfonts for the guitars. Which is just 'fake' guitars. And to aggravate matters, I try and 'speak' the lyrics because, if I may be so candour, I just cannot sing...at all.

Please let me know what you think. If you hate it, please say so, just, if possible, elaborate on why.

costafonix

I dig it ? very cool mix. There's a lot of depth to this song. I wouldn't worry about the vocals I think it adds to the mood of the song. Maybe some more backing harmony (female?) vocals? :-\ Perhaps a touch too long but overall great. well done :yup: :applause:

lindsmuse

I can't hear anything wrong with it - I have a very broad taste in music - and I like this - the only thing I would do - maybe is add another layer of texture at some points in the form of some sound that is at double time - whether it be vocal or drums - unless of course you are wanting a completely laid back sound then I think it is perfect, and you should write (and perform) more. The more you do, the more you can feed the knowledge from the next piece back to the previous if needs be.

aja

Awesome! Listening to it for the third time... Would be great if you get some real guitar thrown in ?

aubs1

aja wrote: Awesome! Listening to it for the third time... Would be great if you get some real guitar thrown in ?

I agree. I kept on waiting for something to happen (like there's something missing). Like an awesome guitar solo from about 3:02 to about 3:44. The gap there seems empty. But then again, only you would know what it is you aim to achieve.

Overall I like that "haunting" sound. I also listened to it a few times, and I must say it's different from the "run of the mill" stuff. Well done! :applause:

sour

Thanks for the feedback guys!

Well, I still have so many things to learn, and moreover, this was an experiment just as many of my other stuff. I tend to do much more electronic and morose-type songs. So this tune I tried was actually fairly out of my league if I can put it as such.

CostaFonix wrote:Maybe some more backing harmony (female?) vocals? :-\ Perhaps a touch too long but overall great. well done :yup: :applause:

I never really though of it, but it makes sense. Only thing is I would have to look for such a person ? And the last part of the song probably was not necessary, it's just that I wanted that extra 'refrain' without any lyrical accomodation. So yes, maybe I did push it.

lindsmuse wrote: maybe is add another layer of texture at some points in the form of some sound that is at double time - whether it be vocal or drums - unless of course you are wanting a completely laid back sound then I think it is perfect, and you should write (and perform) more.

Also did not really think of it, and will try it as soon as possible. I have a tendency (and by that I mean love) to create slower tempo songs. Not sure why. But I will mess around with the beats and see what I can get, again, never even thought of it.

aja wrote: Awesome! Listening to it for the third time... Would be great if you get some real guitar thrown in ?

Thanks ? Would really enjoy that. Three instruments I wish I could play/record.
Piano
Violin
Guitar
That's what my ideal 'band' would consist of. Not that I would throw a violin in this specific track... But the guitars; nothing is better than the real deal.

Aubs1 wrote: I agree. I kept on waiting for something to happen (like there's something missing). Like an awesome guitar solo from about 3:02 to about 3:44. The gap there seems empty. But then again, only you would know what it is you aim to achieve.

Overall I like that "haunting" sound. I also listened to it a few times, and I must say it's different from the "run of the mill" stuff. Well done! :applause:

I am fairly new to the guitar aspect of song making. It feels that doing something electronically, and doing that same piece with a 'real' instrument you end up with two different pieces. They should sound similar, but they just do not (it might be obvious to others, I just learned it through creating songs). So if I tried doing a guitar solo I am absolutely certain I would have messed it up completely. I just do not have the 'feel' (it I can articulate it like that) for it. Hence I rather left it out. But it would have helped though, it would have given the song a slight extra layer.

And most songs I do have that "haunting" feel. Not sure why, maybe it's my personality? :-\

Thanks for the feedback guys, I will test a few different things now that I got some opinions/advice.

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aubs1

sour wrote: And most songs I do have that "haunting" feel. Not sure why, maybe it's my personality? :-\

It's not a bad thing at all.... ?

Where are you from E? I may have missed your introduction.

sour

It is when I want to make an up-beat song. ? But thanks.

And here was my introduction http://www.guitarforum.co.za/introductions/an-hello-from-a-guitarless-person/

I am originally from Paarl, Western Cape. Nowadays I live closer to Cape Town.

Norman86

i liked it... okay, i cant offer anything more constructive right now, but i thought it was pretty good!